Highly inspired by Ammani and BBthots, here is my first Quite Tale / Flash Fiction. Do leave your valuable comments on it.
Dream
The X moves slowly and carefully in a room void of any lights except for the light coming from the radium element in the watch that the person sleeping in the bed is wearing. He takes a knife and suddenly pierces the knife in the stomach of the person sleeping in the bed to kill him. Suddenly someone screams. Ram who is sleeping in the bed wakes up with his heart beats racing fast. He feels his body trembling and still he is not out of his dream in which he was killing someone. Turning to the right, he looks Siva, his friend who actually screamed. Ram asked why he screamed. Siva said that someone was trying to kill him with a knife in his dream. Even in the darkness, Ram is able to see the silhouette of the body of Siva trembling, under the light emitted by the radium in the watch that Siva is wearing in his hand. Is Ram the X?
7.19.2005
Flash Fiction - 1
Posted by P.S. Suresh Kumar at 4:15 PM
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Way to go... U have taken the first step, proceed till u hit the hilt!!!
X is the person with the knife.
Ram is not that person with knife. the person who is being killed is the person with the radium watch in his hand. siva is not the man who is killed coz he is to the right of Ram but he is wearing the radium watch.but if Ram is X siva will be the one who is being killed because both were in dreams. but it is said that the knife pierced thro stomach. so it should not be of Siva's. so...
I think the writer wub have been in his DREAMS while writing this..
good start suresh. has a science fiction feel to it.
thaleeva.....
ithellam namakkethukku...:-)
All i can ascertain is that siva's dream is in slight phase lag with that of Ram. Assuming Ram is X and the one with radium watch is Siva, Though Ram 'killed' Siva in his(Ram's/X's) dream, Siva woke up even before he was killed (in his dream)and since both woke up @ the same time - i feel there's a phase lag - caused by the rare earth radium in the watch....
LK ;-)
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